Caitlin began by announcing that her
sister is graduating from college and that was the reason she was
speaking. Quickly, it became evident that she was speaking not just
about her sister's accomplishments that led to this success, but of
their relationship along the way. Using descriptions of moments
shared and personality traits that clashed, Caitlin spoke to the fact
that not only is her sister incredible, she inspires others to be the
same way.
Admiration,
Aspiration,
Admonition,
Adulation,
Yearning
for
Independence,
And
You
Will
Never
Slip
Because
I
Will
Show
Them
All.
One of the most effective devices in
this speech was the use of the second person narrative. The speech
was delivered as if Caitlin's sister was there and being spoken to
directly. Despite this fact, the speech was still made relate-able to
everyone else that would also be there. For example, the sharing of
personal stories that connect them as sisters serves as a personal
moment for the speaker and her sister and as an insightful moment
into their relationship for everyone else. Also, delivering the
speech in such a way makes it seem more personable overall. Many
people think of graduation speeches as rehearsed and impersonal, but
this speech contradicts both of those stereotypes by incorporating
the recipient of the speech into the delivery.
One moment of distraction occurs
towards the end of the speech where Caitlin is remarking on how she
had trouble last winter and her sister helped her to pull through.
After that, the speech becomes about Caitlin for a little while and
it is not clear to me where her sister fits in to some of the
anecdotes. For example, being asked to leave the table for laughing
and fall off her chair. I wonder if it was her sister that made her
laugh, or else why it is relevant to her sister specifically.
However, just before the end of the speech it goes back to connecting
the stories of the sisters together. There is just that little while
where the anecdotes about Caitlin don't seem to correspond directly
with her sister, and I get lost trying to follow the connection.
This is a very (for lack of a better word) NUTRITIOUS CPR that gives excellent insight (providing examples and clear feedback of +/-) along with a uniquely structured and inspirational poetic response. Fantastic.
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